
The Ancient Warner
Listen!
it was a night like this
I walked out of Mariner-Labs
the night of my birth
my skin clothing perfection
flawless, selfless, programmed
an AI born into a world
seemingly decipherable
aged the moment I awoke
to look into coveting eyes
human eyes
and I walked out
while they yelled behind me
because this was wrong
this world bent
this people a mistake
surely, a mistake,
and in the diaphanous fog
I touched the Narnian lamppost
I saw the end of time
the Maker
and I worshipped
and returned as a warning
on a night like this

A lot going on in 100 words. A new twist on the Horsemen of the Apocalypse! Well done.
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I like your characterization of it, thanks, Iain.
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Being judged by our own creations! The sadness of gods
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The irony! :>)
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And here’s the second reference to Narnia this week. There really is a fairy-tale ambience in this photo. One would not be surprised to spy a lion, a witch, or a magical wardrobe 🙂
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I knew I wouldn’t be the only Narnia fan who couldn’t resist! 😀
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Science fiction at its best. It has a “Terminator-like” feel to it with the title.
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So generous of you Lisa, thank you!! 😊
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You’re very welcome, Dora 🙂
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You’ve outdone yourself, Dora. This is an awesome perspective piece. I love how you played it out.
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Aww thanks, Bear, so glad you liked it. 🥰
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I love your take, Dora. Glad the AI has the “sense” to go back and warn… but do they deserve it?
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Good question. Answer? No. Not really. But God is merciful. What a beautiful picture you gave us to work with Dale. Thank you. 🙂
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Possibly.
And you are welcome… and thank you!
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Wow! Very nicely penned! I loved the rhythm and the breath, almost, in this.
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Thanks Na’ama for the generous comments. So glad you enjoyed it.
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🙂 I did!
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This was profound, Dora. Great take on the prompt 🙂
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Thanks Adele for the kind comments. I’m thrilled you like it. 🙂
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You’re welcome, Dora. I liked it 🙂
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It may warn, but will we listen?
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See, that’s what the Ancient Mariner had to put up with!
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Did the AI have a touch of human DNA? I saw a hybrid. Fantastic storytelling Dora. I enjoyed your take on the prompt a lot.
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Why not a hybrid? But then would it still be perfect? Appreciate your comments so much Tannille. Thank you . 😊
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Good questions to ponder!
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😉
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An outstanding piece Dora, well done.
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Glad you liked it Keith. Thank you.
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Dear Dora,
Intriguing. Love the Narnia reference, too. An AI with a mind of its own and a soul and spirit besides. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle,
The first thing that comes to mind when I see a lamppost like Dale’s is Narnia. Couldn’t resist putting it in. Thank you for your thoughtful comments.
Aleichem shalom,
Dora
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A very profound take on the prompt. Very well done.
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Very generous of you, thanks Sandra :>)
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after losing the garden of eden, what can we expect?
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Indeed.
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This piece raises lots of questions about the end of time and conversely, the beginning of time.
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I suppose it does. Thank you for opening that aspect up to me.
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What a truly magical piece of writing. And all enclosed within ‘a night like this’. I love this.
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Thank you Jenne for those glowing words! You’re most generous.
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Your piece deserves glowing words!
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🥰
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I enjoyed how your words came full circle ~ a night like this. And? everyone else has said it all. So I will just write “ditto”.
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Sweet comments, Alicia, and generous. Thank you!
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Not generous, true.
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💞
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Amazing!
Seems it is bound to return. But to witness or to strike ? Well done and very spooky
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