The Accidental Rose

Seeing a rose, I once said that we stand out like that, red on green, and you reply, tongue-in-cheek, you mean like an ambulance at 3 AM in a Mississippi swamp and I shut up, crushed, like you’d said we were an accident that had been waiting to happen, as if crucial to finding the way is this: there is no beginning or end, just a screeching of brakes, a clang of metal, the jolting of bones, and then the long drawn out police report and insurance claims, a ledger of rights and wrongs, and the spindrift pages in the moonlit night where my heart spills and the nightingale vies with a shrike impaled on a thorny bush that ought to have a bloom, a rose, while someone, no one, looks for a medic to resuscitate the dead in an ambulance at 3 AM.


For Cee's FOTD 
and dVerse's Prosery where Merril asks us to use a line from a Jo Harjo poem, “Crucial to finding the way is this: there is no beginning or end,” to write a 144-word piece of prose. Click on Mr. Linky and join in!

41 thoughts on “The Accidental Rose”

  1. Oh what an amazing stream of consciousness write! These words “and the nightingale vies with a shrike impaled on a thorny bush that ought to have a bloom” to me are so powerful. The juxtaposition of the delicate nightingale with the shrike impaled….wow. You put us right in this scene!

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  2. Seems like these two are on different wavelengths, one of possibility and the other on termination. Sad for one but little satisfaction for the other.

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    1. Merril,
      The SoC seemed natural to me for your prompt, no beginning, no end, so I went with it and enjoyed it. Thank you for the comments and thank you for the great prompt. 🙂
      Pax,
      Dora

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  3. Yeah, he should have kept his mouth shut! 🤣 “spindrift pages in the moonlit night where my heart spills and the nightingale vies with a shrike impaled on a thorny bush that ought to have a bloom” nice little rant there!

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    1. Tricia,
      The swampy weather we’re having out here makes me want to rant! Thank goodness for a little “prosery” to let off steam vicariously. :>)
      Pax,
      Dora

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  4. Two startlingly different ways of describing a relationship here, which goes to underline how differently people view the world. Great use of the prompt Dora!

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  5. Wow! Such differences in viewpoint. I feel sad for one and angry at the callousness of the other. Really like the image of the nightingale and the shrike.

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    1. R.C.,
      Now that you’ve pointed them out, I see how they function as emblems of the two viewpoints. Thank you so much for your thoughtful comments.
      pax,
      dora

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    1. Helen,
      Me too, because relationships fall foul of miscommunications all the time. And I was playing too with the idea of an unreliable narrator. So who knows? The heart is deceptive. Thank you for your wonderful comment.
      pax,
      Dora

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  6. I love this, how you used the different metaphors for how different views can be for two different people. How even a rose can be wonderful or red as clotted blood. Maybe this the voice of the other party in my story.

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    1. Björn,
      The miscommunication between lovers: reams have been written about it and still it goes on. I like the way you addressed it and I can very well see the other party being this one. And i love your poetic turn of phrase to describe the two points of view. “Red as clotted blood” is how somebody saw it at any rate! Thank you for your comments as always!
      pax,
      Dora

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  7. kaykuala

    as if crucial to finding the way is this:
    there is no beginning or end, just a
    screeching of brakes……….

    I love how you bring in a whole lot of works that follow beautifully into a minor skirmish. It would happen in life many times, Dora!
    Good reminder!

    Hank

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  8. Great way to include the lines. Your stream of consciousness is superb, the reader really hears the voice.

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