
the teapot boiled
the cat began to whistle
the man bolted out
the world began to tremble
the cat began to whistle
the pot was just a thought
it was never really there
the man bolted out
he was missing his body
he left his coat and hat
the world began to tremble
we turned the music up
nothing was hard to hear
I thought I’d try my hand at some absurdist poetry of the type popularized in the middle of the twentieth century as Grace at dVerse challenges us with a new poetry form: “Today’s poetry form is Trimeric (Trimeric \tri-(meh)-rik), which was invented by Charles A. Stone.
1. Trimeric has 4 stanzas
2. The first stanza has 4 lines
3. The other three stanzas have 3 lines each
4. The first line of each stanza is a refrain of the corresponding line in the first stanza (so 2nd stanza starts with the second line, third stanza starts with the third line, etc.).
5. The sequence of lines, then, is abcd, b – -, c – -, d – -.
Note: No other rules on line length, meter, or rhyme.
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Oh, I love it… and with the picture, I feel that you went with a Lewis Carrol mood…
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Bjorn,
You reassure me. The mood itself is a wee bit crazy but fun. :>)
pax,
dora
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Dora, that image really sets the tone. Sounds like a fun tea party. What was in the tea anyway? 😉
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Lisa,
(Laughing) Wouldn’t you like to know?! 😉I just heard the cat whistling that’s all. :>)
pax,
dora
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🙂
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poem and image are a great match. truly enjoyed both
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So glad you did. Thank you.
pax,
dora
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Dora , thanks for the slice of levity. When all else fails, Nonsense rules. I get into a Lewis Carroll mode sometimes too. As a trimeric, it is perfection.
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Glenn,
Thank you for those very kind words! I’m thrilled you enjoyed it and I absolutely agree with your dictum. 😀
pax,
dora
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What fun this is – Love the trimeric poem that perfectly captured the image too. I am always happy to read whimsy funny poems anytime.
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Grace,
Thank you! And thanks for the wonderful prompt.
pax,
dora
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So, you experimented with two new forms at once. I think you did really well with that. There is a little Lewis Carroll flavor to it. I love that the pot boiled, but the cat whistled. Really great. 🙂
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Thanks, Susan. I’m so glad you enjoyed it. :>)
pax,
dora
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There is something in that tea!!! Haha 😀 love this brilliant, brilliant execution of the Trimeric form 💝💝
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Sanaa,
You are too kind. Thanks for those generous comments!
pax,
dora
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I really, really, really love surreal works like this, Dora, and yours does not disappoint at all! This was so much fun 🙂
-David
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David,
Your comments made my day! Thank you and I’m so glad you liked it.
pax,
dora
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You did a great job with this prompt Dora!
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Thank you so much, Dwight!
pax,
dora
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You are welcome! I passed on this one… I am not a fan of form poetry that just repeats lines over in every stanza.
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A little absurd. 🙂
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:>)
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Simple, straightforward whackadoodle perfect! Just what I needed to close out my night. Thanks!
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Ron,
Now that makes me smile. Thank you!
pax,
dora
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I enjoyed this trip to wonderland Dora: thank you!
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Ingrid,
So glad you enjoyed it! Thank you.
pax,
dora
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Brilliant writing! Following your blog 🙂
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Reena,
I’m honored!! Thank you!
pax,
Dora
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Reblogged this on Reena Saxena and commented:
It’s nothing ….. by jollybeggar
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Thank you Reena. :>)
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ooooh. this leaves me with more questions that answers — in a thrilling way. is he dead. is it a dream. how?
well done!
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That’s the thing: it’s absurd to even think about really. :>)
pax,
dora
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Brilliant piece, Dora!
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Thank you so much, Eugi!
pax,
dora
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My pleasure, Dora!
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Like Bjorn, I thought of Lewis Carroll too – very whacky and fun.
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Marion,
Thank you so much. I think I had too much fun with this one! :>)
pax,
dora
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Absolutely fantastic absurdist poem, Dora! I wish I’d gone that route now! I’ve always got time for the absurd 🙂 It feels like a scene from Alice in Wonderland.
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So humorous and simple. I think you used the prompt perfectly, Dora!
Excellent title! 😉
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Susan,
Thank you! I had a lot of fun with this form.
pax,
dora
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😁❤
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You call it absurdist. I’m certain there are plenty of critics around who would analyse you a profound meaning in it 🙂
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Jane,
Critics, as in the blind leading the blind, think they see a lot of things and can’t see what’s in front of them!
pax,
dora
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I think many of them have a deathly fear of looking stupid, and more than anything want to look clever, so they spout what are essentially absurdities.
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Cat in hat image = delightful. Your trimeric = also delightful.
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Helen,
You are too kind. Thank you so much for reading.
pax,
dora
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Wow, I love this!! ❤
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Thanks, Kate. I’m thrilled you enjoyed this.
pax,
dora
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It’s got such a wonderful sense of surreal and increasing chaos, like a dream starting to whirl.
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So generous of you, Kate., thanks. For me, when the world is changing too fast or for the worse, I think absurdism is an alternate way of talking about it. The humor alone is like a safety net. 🙂
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Yes! I think I tend toward angry satire as my safety net. Absurdism is probably healthier, and more pleasant.
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Letting off steam in either case is healthy … and relatively harmless. 🙂
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What a wonderful whimsical poem, Dora!
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Wonderful bit of Jabberwocky Dora. I loved the images it danced into my head. Well written!
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This made me smile! There’s a lot of sense in nonsense. (K)
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This is an exquisite trimeric. I haven’t tried it but I recognize the skill when it comes to repeated lines. Bravo.
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Jude,
Thanks for that. Your feedback is very much appreciated. So many poetic forms, so little time! 😉
pax,
dora
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very cool. an absurdist child’s tale, writ Carroll, with a twist of modernity ~
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A much appreciated comment, thank you, M.
pax,
dora
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